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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the top territories in how many
billion
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kWh
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 of
electricity
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 was produced and consumed in 2014.
Overall
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, all countries produced
electricity
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 more than was consumed except for Germany. China and the United States had significantly more production and consumption than other countries. And at the bottom was Korea. Rep. It is obvious that China was the country which had the most production and consumption of
electricity
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 in 2014.
Then
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, the USA was in the second rank which produced 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and consumed 3866
billion
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kWh
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.
Moreover
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,
electricity
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 was produced and consumed nearly at the same level in Russia and Korea. Rep. It is evident that
electricity
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 was produced more than consumed in Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil in 2014.
However
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, Germany was an exception territory which consumed more than its production. The country was in in the bottom is Korea. Rep. produced and consumed 485.1 and 449.5
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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