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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures illustrate a
city
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 hospital and ways to reach it in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
staff
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 and public
car
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park
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,
bus
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 stops were removed.
Moreover
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, a public
car
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park
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, a
staff
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car
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park
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, a
bus
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 station and two roundabouts were constructed.
Also
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, the
City
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 Hospital, Ring
Road
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,
City
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Road
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 and Hospital Rd were unchanged. The Ring
Road
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 and
City
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 Hospital were not modified at the top of the
map
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.
Additionally
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, a public
car
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park
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 was built on the right side.
Subsequently
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, the
staff
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 and public
car
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park
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 was replaced by a
staff
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car
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park
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 in the middle right. It is evident that the
bus
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 stops were removed in the middle.
Then
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, two squares were built on the hospital
road
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 in the middle of the
map
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.
Also
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, a
bus
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 station was constructed on the left side of the
map
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.
Therefore
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, the
city
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road
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 at the bottom of the
map
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 was not revised.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, staff, car, park, bus, road, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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