Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Consuming
convenience
has a significant place in todays
world. Traditional Change to a genitive case
today's
food
consuming
is less preferred than Replace the word
consumption
convenience
food
. Some people
agrees
that ready-to-use Change the verb form
agree
food
is much more better than homemade traditional food
. However
, some people
says
the opposite. It is often discussed that traditional Correct subject-verb agreement
say
food
is healthier than convenience
food
.
On the one hand, ready-to-use food
saves a lot of time
and it is easy to prepare. To elaborate on this
, full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
workers doesn't
have enough Change the verb form
don't
time
to prepare a meal for themselves. Namely, they are more tend to consume fast foods
. In other words
, workers choose the simple way rather than the complicated way to save their time
. Additionally
, majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
people
thinks
that Change the verb form
think
convenience
food
is much more tasty than traditional food
food
and it is much more preferred across the globe.
On the other hand
, studies show that convenience
food
cause
obesity by consuming fast Replace the word
causes
food
. Doctors advices
that Correct your spelling
advises
advise
people
should consume foods
that include vegetable
and organic products. BecauseFix the agreement mistake
vegetables
,
vegetable and organic products Remove the comma
apply
has
better effects Change the verb form
have
to
Change preposition
on
human
body. Namely, Add an article
the human
people
should choose consuming
traditional homemade Change the verb form
to consume
foods
rather than convenience
food
. Another research says that convenience
food
has bad effects on human psychology. On the contrary
traditional foods
has better
effect on psychology.
In conclusion, Add an article
a better
people
tend to choose convenience
food
because it is much easy
to prepare and it has a significant advantage Replace the word
easier
o
workers that Correct your spelling
for
doesn't
have Change the verb form
don't
time
to prepare a meal in Correct article usage
the old-fashion
old-fashion
way. Correct your spelling
old-fashioned
Nevertheless
, studies recommends
that traditional homemade Change the verb form
recommend
foods
are healthier to
Change preposition
for
human
body. My view is thatAdd an article
the human
,
traditional Remove the comma
apply
foods
are better to
Change preposition
for
human
body and Add an article
the human
it
should be much Correct pronoun usage
they
more
preferred Correct quantifier usage
apply
than
fast Change preposition
to
foods
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