Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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To control poverty in some poor

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one of the main solutions is that

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there are other positive solutions which are more practical. I agree that

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the poor

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more job opportunities rather than giving

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from developed regions can be robbed by politics in developing

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lifestyle for people

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those areas.

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has been sent to Africa by many

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, none of the financial problems or

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lack of management. On the other side, poor

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of experts and imports will change in

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created lots of job opportunities in recent decades. In conclusion, In my

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it is a good way to help poor

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Coherence and Cohesion

Structure your essay more clearly by organizing paragraphs around a single main idea and using clear topic sentences to guide the reader.

Task Achievement

Make sure all parts of the question are addressed thoroughly, including discussing different types of aid other than financial.

Task Achievement

Support your points with more specific and diverse examples to strengthen your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay contains an introduction and a conclusion that relate to the topic.

Task Achievement

You have addressed the prompt by agreeing that developed countries should provide other forms of assistance besides financial aid.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
trade barriers
sustainable development
environmental conservation

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