Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
To control poverty in some poor
countries
one of the main solutions is that development
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developing
countries
give money
to them while
,
there are other positive solutions which are more practical. I agree that Remove the comma
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development
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developing
countries
can have effective
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an effective
,
if they Remove the comma
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will
invest Verb problem
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inside
the poor Change preposition
in
countries
and make
more job opportunities rather than giving Verb problem
create
money
.
It is observed that,
financial Remove the comma
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helps
from developed regions can be robbed by politics in developing Change the verb form
help
countries
. That is
why in
most of the time Change preposition
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money
cannot effort
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afford
beneficial
lifestyle for people Correct article usage
a beneficial
of
those areas. Change preposition
in
For example
, every year the amount of money
has been sent to Africa by many Charites
in developed Correct your spelling
charities
countries
however
, none of the financial problems or people
poverty have not solved. Change noun form
people's
In addition
, sometimes these financial helps
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help
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spent
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fields
due to
lack of management.
On the other side, poor countries
can ask to
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for
a
other way, Change the article
an
for instance
, investigation of rich reigns in different areas can has
effective impacts for both sides. Change the verb form
have
Due to
increasing
rate of investigations job opportunities will Correct article usage
the increasing
be risen
in that society, Wrong verb form
rise
furthermore
, the amount
of experts and imports will change in Change the quantifier
number
following
years. Correct article usage
the following
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establishing
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of Correct your spelling
launch
NIKE
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been
created lots of job opportunities in recent decades.
In conclusion, In my Unnecessary verb
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opinion
it is a good way to help poor Add a comma
opinion,
countries
with
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other type
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other types
,
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kind
helps
will continue over the years and many people can Change the wording
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bits of help
get
benefit from that.Verb problem
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Coherence and Cohesion
Structure your essay more clearly by organizing paragraphs around a single main idea and using clear topic sentences to guide the reader.
Task Achievement
Make sure all parts of the question are addressed thoroughly, including discussing different types of aid other than financial.
Task Achievement
Support your points with more specific and diverse examples to strengthen your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay contains an introduction and a conclusion that relate to the topic.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the prompt by agreeing that developed countries should provide other forms of assistance besides financial aid.