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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The two bar charts illustrate the percentage of people who
born
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 in
Australia
 and outside
Australia
 in 3
diffrents
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different
areas
 (
towns
,
cities
,
rural
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and rural
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areas
).
These
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 comparison is between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, a glance at the bar charts
show
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 that in
Australia
 and outside
Australia
 the highest proportion were born in
cities
 in both of the given years. On the other side,
while
population
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the population
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 of
towns
have
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage in 1955, in 2010 rural
areas
 had the smallest amount of
the
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births. In 1955,
over
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more than 50% of
total
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the total
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were
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 born in
cities
 (around 50% in
Australia
 and 60%
in
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outside
the
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Australia
).
However
, the proportion of
towns
in
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at
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this
 time was almost 20% in
Australia
 and
in
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outside
Australia
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Australia,
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this
 percentage
were
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was
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 lower which was around 10% of
total
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the total
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. In terms of rural
areas
, 30% and 40% of people were born in
Australia
 and outside
Australia
 respectively. On the other side, in 2010 same as the 1995
cities
 had the highest percentages in both
Australia
 and outside
Australia
.
Furthermore
 in
Australia
, the amount of
towns
 and rural population
were
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had the same percentages which was around 18%.
In outside
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the
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Australia
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apply
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while
,
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 there were around 10% and 5% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, areas, towns, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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