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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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know
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news
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it
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just
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informaiton
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information
, you can relate to it or not in the olden
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simple
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 Economy that creat a connected society that any
news
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effect
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our economy has changed and become more
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Diversified
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, On that base I can tell you that
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 agree with
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 . The pace in our modern life
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 very fast and the old
news
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 and newspaper can't serve very
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 era Excess information that
consumer
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waste
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of
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resours
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resources
resource
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 time , why
i
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 waste time for some info that will not add
any thing
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 to me or to my life , I can use that Precious Hour in
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imprtint
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important
 things
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for example
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 read An article in my business field that can expose me to much
Needed
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 information. To cut it short For me I totally agree With
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doesn't
 feel connected anymore to the
daliy
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daily
 newsfeed They rather
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see Pacific
News
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 and
goggle
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google
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 it because it's more efficient and
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 for the fast Lifestyle that we Have in
21st
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 century.
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