The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the percentage of people from 1970 to 2020 in four Asian countries living in
citites
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cities
, and predictions for 2030 to 2040.
Overall
, we can see that the percentages of
population
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in Malaysia and Thailand are lowest and highest, respectively between 1970 and 2040. In two countries,
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is Malaysia and Indonesia, the percentages of
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in Malaysia and Indonesia
dramaticlly
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dramatically
from 30
percent
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to 80
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per cent
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and from over 10
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to under 60
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, respectively between 1970 and 2040.
Other
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countries, we can see that the percentage of people in the Philipines and Thailand increased
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. They accounted for over 30% to over 40% and from under 20% to over 10% in 1970 and 2010. After that, from 2010 to 2040, the
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proportion
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proportion
of
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the population
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in
Philipines
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the Philipines
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and Thailand increased
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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