The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided graph demonstrates the fraction of smartphone owners utilising different phone features.
Overall
,
it is clear that
people who kept in touch with making calls, maintained the same level, standing at the first position over the
years
.
However
, the percentage of browsing for websites literally experienced a considerable surge in 2
years
,
while
there is no info in 2006,
likewise
, playing games had a remarkable upward trend.
To begin
with, telephones were majorly used for calls , levelling out at 100% in all
years
except 2010, reducing by 1 per cent. The proportion of taking photos went up by 5 per cent every 2
years
, reaching
to
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76% in the
last
year,
while
sending and receiving messages increased slightly stabilising at around 70 to 80%.
Moreover
, in 2006, there was no information about searching the internet, but in the
late
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years
, it saw significant growth, going up from 41 to 73% respectively.
Similarly
, recording video had no data in the first year,
whereas
reaching 35 at the final stage and playing games started by being at 17% before inclining to around 40 in the next
years
.
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