In some countries, TV programmes are transmitted throughout the day and night. Some people think that 24 hour transmission has positive impact, while others believe that it is negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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problems and sleeping disorders, which raises the inclination of people towards the belief that TV programmes should not be telecasted 24 hours. Others,
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, harbour the thought that TV shows should be transmitted throughout the day and night.
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Develop your introduction to provide a clearer understanding of both views. This will guide the reader and set a strong foundation for your essay.
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Enhance the logical progression of your ideas by using linking words and organizing your points in distinct paragraphs.
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Provide specific examples or evidence to support your opinion, making your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
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You present both sides of the argument in the introduction, which is essential for a balanced discussion essay.
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You're using complex sentence structures, which demonstrates a good command of the language, even if there are some inaccuracies.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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