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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much production of the primary fuels took place in
United
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 Kingdom from 1981 to 2000. It is noted from the figure that the generation of petroleum was higher than coal and natural gas. Rather these two crossed
path
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in
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at
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 certain times.
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, there were
dramatical
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 fluctuations in the manufacturing of those power sources over the whole
periods
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period
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. In 1981, petroleum was produced by around 90
units
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 which ended up in 140
units
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 in the year 2000. The lowest quantity of petroleum was manufactured in 1990.
On the other hand
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, the constituent of coal was 80 in 1981 which
was
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declined by around 45
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in
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 the end of 2000. Though the rate for natural gas was below 40 in 1981, it started to increase gradually from the year 1989 and reached
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100 in 2000.
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, the production of coal and natural gas was
same
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the same
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 in the
year
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years
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 1984 and 1991 with
the
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units
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 of 40 and 50 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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