The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The two maps illustrate the development that took place

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show examples

Paradise

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Island

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between

past

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the past

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and present .

Overall

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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation ,the first one shows

the

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how the

show examples

island

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looked before

touristic

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tourist

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development,

the

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and the

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second one after. In past ,

Paradise

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Island

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has palm trees . It is

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apply

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surrounded by a sea and has a beach on

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apply

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the west side . Over an undisclosed period, the

island

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was completely transformed with the addition of

hotel

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a hotel

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complex

and

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apply

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swimming pool and pier

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paradise

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Paradise

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Island

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has a small pier on the west of the

island

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which has been changed to

larger

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a larger

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pier and the

boat

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boats

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Wrong verb form

been

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replaced with cruise ships

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, in the east

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the most noticeable addition is that all the palm trees

was

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were

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cut down

replaced

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and replaced

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with an open restaurant and a BBQ area in the centre of the

island

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Moreover

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Paradise

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Island

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is now surrounded by a cycle path , which shows the way

can use

Verb problem

apply

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to visit the beach . The natural spring in the east remains but a new café has been built nearby.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words paradise, island with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

187 words

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