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The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#show #condition #paradise #island #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The two maps illustrate the development that took place
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
Paradise
Island
 between
past
Correct article usage
the past
show examples
 and present .
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation ,the first one shows
the
Rephrase
how the
show examples
island
 looked before
touristic
Replace the word
tourist
show examples
 development,
the
Correct word choice
and the
show examples
 second one after. In past ,
Paradise
Island
 has palm trees . It is
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
surrounded by a sea and has a beach on
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the west side . Over an undisclosed period, the
island
 was completely transformed with the addition of
hotel
Correct article usage
a hotel
show examples
 complex
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
swimming pool and pier
paradise
Capitalize word
Paradise
show examples
Island
 has a small pier on the west of the
island
 which has been changed to
larger
Correct article usage
a larger
show examples
 pier and the
boat
Fix the agreement mistake
boats
show examples
is
Wrong verb form
been
show examples
 replaced with cruise ships
In contrast
, in the east
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the most noticeable addition is that all the palm trees
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 cut down
replaced
Correct word choice
and replaced
show examples
 with an open restaurant and a BBQ area in the centre of the
island
 .
Moreover
 ,
Paradise
Island
 is now surrounded by a cycle path , which shows the way
can use
Verb problem
apply
show examples
to visit the beach . The natural spring in the east remains but a new café has been built nearby.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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