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The given line chart illustrates the consumption of three different kinds of spreads from the year 1981 to 2007. The spreads are margerince, low fats and reduced spreads, and butter.

The given line chart illustrates the consumption of three different kinds of spreads from the year 1981 to 2007. The spreads are margerince, low fats and reduced spreads, and butter.
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The given line chart illustrates the
consumption
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 of three different kinds of spreads from the year 1981 to 2007. The spreads are
margarine
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, low fats and reduced spreads, and
butter
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.
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, it is obvious from the line graph that the
consumption
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 of
butter
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 experienced a decline.
Margarine
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 experienced fluctuations, and low fat and reduced spreads experienced a decline after a sharp rise. In 1981, people consumed around 141
grams
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 of
butter
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 per
day
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, and in 1986, it experienced a slight increase by 160
grams
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 per
day
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,
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then
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 the
consumption
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 of
butter
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 experienced a sharp decline, and in 1996,
butter
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consumption
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 reached 70
grams
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 per
day
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. In 1981, the
consumption
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 of
margarine
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 was 70
grams
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 per
day
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, and from 1991 to 1996, it remained steady, which was 100
grams
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 per
day
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. Unlike
butter
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 and
margarine
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, people started consuming
low fat
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low-fat
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 and reduced spreads from the year 1996, and it experienced a sharp increase in 2001.
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, it slightly decreased to 75
grams
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 per
day
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, margarine, butter, grams, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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