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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. As

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. As
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During the
last
 3
years
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years,
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 the
temporary
Correct quantifier usage
number of temporary
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migrants
 number
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased in 2006.
This
 essay will show how many
migrants worker
Fix the agreement mistake
migrant workers
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 have been
join to
Wrong verb form
joining
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 four countries. Over the 1000
migrants
 was found in increasing statistic who lived in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 four places. Each of
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 countries
have
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has
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their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 own below table of population and all of them
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased over the three years.
For example
,
initially
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initially,
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 there were 152,000 migrant workers in 2003
in
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apply
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Australia until 2006 when
population
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the population
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 of
migrants
 were high
on
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at
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 219,000. In New
Zeland
Correct your spelling
Zealand
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were
Correct pronoun usage
there were
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 65.000
migrants
 and it
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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grew
up
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apply
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in 2006 to 87,000
and
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apply
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etc. In conclusion, how below table
is showed
Wrong verb form
shows
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 us the growth rate, there was a huge splash of people from
another countries
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another country
other countries
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, who came to work abroad.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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