Nowadays,a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatmens instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.
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treatment
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treatments
medicine
. I think this
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a pros
pros
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pro
people
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their habits
medicine
and they can save from expensive treatment
.
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medicine
and tratment
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treatment
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a doctor
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MRI
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people
doctor
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the doctor
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sends
people
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pro
people
prefer to take alternative
medicine
and treatment
because some medicine
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medicines
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chemicals
medicine
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Homoeopathic
medicine
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show
people
.
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This
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choose alternative
medicine
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a positive
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You have identified two clear advantages of alternative medicine, which provides a good foundation for your argument.
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The essay is focused on the question, considering whether alternative medicines and treatments are a positive or negative development.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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