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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar graph illustrates the genres of
music
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 albums purchased by the British based on their genders and ages.
Overall
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, it is evident that all 3 types of
music
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 were purchased more by males compared to women.
Furthermore
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, except for Classical
Music
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, youngsters tended to buy
music
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 albums with a bigger preference than other age groups,
whereas
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 adults had a tendency to purchase classical ones. Looking in more detail, the higher rates of purchases of the pop genre are population those who were 16-24 and 25-34 ages at around 32%, though
this
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 figure for adults took up about 10%. In terms of gender comparison, the proportion of males was significantly higher rather than females, with roughly 30% compared to almost 18%. When it comes to Rock
music
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, the identical trend experienced since the young was leader, followed by the same tendency. Regarding the remaining type of
music
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 Albom, different from other categories, the percentages of adults comprised almost 20%, making it the dominant.
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, the ratio of the 16-24 age group of people accounted for approximately 17%,
although
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 other groups made up around tiny percentages.
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 other
music
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 genres, the male rate for buying Classical
music
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 surpassed the ratio of females by about 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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