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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts provide key information about the nutrients included in our diet that may negatively affect our health. These nutrients are categorized into three groups:
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that dinner had the highest percentage of
sodium
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 and saturated fat.
Additionally
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, snacks contained the highest percentage of added
sugar
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,
whereas
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 breakfast had the lowest percentage across all three categories.
According to
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 the data,
sodium
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 and saturated fat accounted for 43% and 37% of the nutrients in dinner, respectively.
In contrast
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, snacks contributed 14% of
sodium
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 and 21% of saturated fat. Added
sugar
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 was highest in snacks at 42%, followed by dinner at 23%. In terms of breakfast, the percentages of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 were the lowest among all meals, with 14% for
sodium
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 and 16% for both saturated fat and added
sugar
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. For lunch, the percentages of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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 were moderate, at 29%, 26%, and 19%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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