A friend of your is thinking of going of campaning holiday for the first time in this summer. He/She need an advice from you.

Dear Het, I am writing
letter
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to give
some
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you some
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advice regarding
camping
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the camping
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holiday, which you
have
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asked
to
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me
when
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we met
last
time. I hope you will like and follow my suggestions. You are visiting first time for the camping at Himachal, you will love to do tracking it will be great fun and experience and you will get
chance
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to engage
new
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with new
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people. Prior to that, there are some possible disadvantages which you may face like,
weather
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the weather
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of Himachal is unpredictable .
Moreover
, you need to prepare
for
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to
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walk nearly 20k steps daily. I like to
do
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go
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camping so much that, I would book a ticket right now but before
that
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I have to ask my manager for holidays and it seems hard to approve at
this
moment because I already used my vacation before, during my sister’s marriage time.
To conclude
, you will definitely enjoy your trip it is going to most memorable trip of your life. Don’t forget to send your snaps of mountains to me. Thank you, Rohan
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Work on improving logical structure by ensuring a clear progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the introduction and conclusion by clearly stating the purpose and summarizing the advice.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or scenarios to support the advice given.
task achievement
Clear attempt at giving advice with a friendly tone.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes an introduction and conclusion, making it well rounded.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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