Topic: Some people think that people commit crime because of poverty and social problems, while others think it is because of their bad nature. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is always an argument about whether wrongdoers'

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or because of bad

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personalities and nature.

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both factors could be true to a certain area, I am going to mention some examples for each one of them in

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essay, including social factors, family cultures and so on.

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with,

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alone accounts for a fairly high number of crimes each year.

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, in an urban area like New York City, we often witness much

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crime rates in poorer towns like Harlem than we see in Queens, which is a rich place. It does not only apply to

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NYC and basically

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is a true fact for almost all the cities in the world. In fact, most of these problems are caused by lower education levels across those groups of people mostly because they can not afford it, resulting in little to no job opportunities for the individuals. So, when a person can not get a decent job because of no knowledge in any specific field, there is no other way for him to make money.

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could not be the only reason as it can

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be seen that even some people who are in good financial stages, often break bad.

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is what makes me consider that social problems are too, a part of

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matter.

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, a person might have even been raised in a rich family, but

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the lack of certain lessons and experiences that should be

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to a kid like how to control desires,

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person grows to become a criminal. In detail,

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a man or woman despite having

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they needed in life, would sometimes have some complexes

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being

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parents or the culture, or not being thankful enough for what they have. Resulting in bad

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in order to

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those leakages. In conclusion, I think crimes are caused by a combination of

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and social problems, as both play a big role in

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matter. Lack of knowledge of basic childcare skills, not being able to educate and all the facts mentioned above, are examples of both figures.

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Ensure consistent tense usage and correct common grammatical errors such as 'behiver' to 'behavior' and 'tought' to 'taught'.

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Provide more detailed connections between the given examples and their implications on the argument to bolster the argument further.

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Try to maintain a more formal tone by avoiding contractions and colloquial expressions.

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The essay presents a balanced view that acknowledges both sides of the argument.

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Good use of specific examples such as the reference to New York City to support arguments.

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Clear structure with introduction, main body paragraphs discussing each perspective, and a conclusion summarizing the view.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

370 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

socio-economic factors
unemployment
inadequate housing
family breakdown
peer pressure
community support
predisposition
aggression
empathy
thrill-seeking behaviors
marginalized communities
multifaceted approach
environmental factors
personal characteristics

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