The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

The two pictures provide information about
money
spend
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spent
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in the UK by tourists over a period of 20 years and why they visited
this
country.
It is clear that
visitors spent more and more
money
by
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as
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the
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apply
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time went
, even
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by, even
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though we can see frequent declines during the whole timeframe.
Also
, there were 4 reasons for
visit
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visiting
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: Holiday, Business, Visiting friends or relatives, and others. Looking at the pie charts, the proportion
for
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of
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holiday
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holidays
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accounted for 44.1% in 1980.
However
, it declined by 5% 20 years later, comprising 39.1%. It still remained as the first place among them. Only 9.8% of people answered that they came for other
reason
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reasons
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. The other two,
on the other hand
, experienced increases
by
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of
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2.1%,
9.5
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and 9.5
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% respectively. Focusing on the line graph, from 1992 to 1995, the
money
they spent in the United Kingdom rose by around 3,000 which was the biggest increase across the years.
Also
, it can be seen that tourists spent the largest amount of
money
in 1995, peaking at 12,000 million.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • expenditure
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • 30-year period
  • tourism
  • business trips
  • educational purposes
  • visiting friends or relatives
  • significant changes
  • global events
  • economic conditions
  • socio-cultural changes
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