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Nowadays there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all arounf the world . What are the causes and solutions of this problem .

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 we live in a smart world in the era of technological development, there is a lot of
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 pollution around the world. In my opinion, there are many solutions
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 worldwide problem. One of the causes is non-recyclable
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 products, which are considered non-friendly to nature. Research conducted in 2009 by MIT illustrated the amount of non-recyclable
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 garbage produced in the USA. The result was 244 tons of harmful
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 in just the year 2009, which is considered a significant number. They discovered that non-recyclable
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 killed many sea animals and spread diseases around the earth.
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, the type of
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 can be changed if governments around the world agree on the production of environmentally friendly
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 and apply recyclable
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 rules in their industries.
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, harmful
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 production will significantly decrease, and nature will be greatly enhanced
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,
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 pollution is a dangerous problem that can affect large areas of the planet and kill animals. Production should be restricted to solve
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 problem;
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, the negative impact will remain and increase.
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Include more specific examples and data globally, not just from one country, to strengthen your argument.
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Provide a more detailed breakdown of potential solutions and their implementation, such as specific policies or initiatives.
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Improve transitions between different ideas and paragraphs for smoother reading.
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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points and solutions.
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The example from MIT research adds credibility and specificity to your argument about the impact of non-recyclable plastics.
coherence cohesion
You have effectively acknowledged the negative impact of plastic and suggested a logical solution by involving government regulations.

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