Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests comma and whether they are married or single. some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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inquires some new employees,
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the administrator
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may
asks
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for applicants' personal
informations
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information
pieces of information
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.
This
process might
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to be
uneccesary
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unnecessary
necessary
, but often used for acquiring important aspects of what they are looking for. In
this
essay, I will be discussing both opinions.
Firstly
, business employers' job is to find recruits;
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are matched for given
works
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. In my opinion, asking deeper into more of a person can
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their true identity.
Moreover
, finding
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personality
that is
not made for getting the job, but to work along in
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term, can get them familiar
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the group.
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Additionally
, recruiters getting
along with
applicants via private
questions
,
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could be far more comfortable and relaxing;
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warmer and more flexible connections between them. 
On the other hand
, digging too much into
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the private
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side of
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applicants
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could harm
company's
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the company's
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reputation.
Therefore
,
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the interviewer
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interviewer
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interviewers
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must consider carefully
with
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what they will be asking
instead
of randomly bombing the rude
questions
. To draw a line between being friendly
or
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and
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rude,
administrator
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the administrator
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should carefully think
what
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to ask.
For example
, they can try asking themselves the same
questions
that are planned to use in the real interview.
This
way,
interviewer
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the interviewer
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could reflect on their statements from
third-person
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a third-person
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view;
this
is
great
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a great
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way to improve and adapt for better asking. 
To conclude
,
busines's
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business
business's
employers can question
in
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two opposite types. The first one is
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orthodox
orthodontics
; the logical ones.
This
can be used in
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the identification
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of whether the employee is matched to what they are given for work,
according to
their skills. On the other side, asking
for
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personal
questions
can be tactical;
for example
hobbies:
interests
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and interests
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • team dynamics
  • organizational culture
  • work-life balance
  • collaborative environments
  • bias
  • discrimination
  • conscious or unconscious bias
  • privacy concerns
  • personal boundaries
  • professional abilities
  • skills, qualifications, and experience
  • legal and ethical considerations
  • divert attention
  • significant professional attributes
  • relevant to the job
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