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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates three main kinds of fuel
petroleum
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, coal and natural gas in the United Kingdom over the
period
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 of 19 years from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, both the proportion of
petroleum
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 and natural gas witnessed upward trends
while
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 the figure for coal experienced a contrasting movement over the given
period
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. The amount of energy produced by
petroleum
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 started at 95
million
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tonnes
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 of oil,
then
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 decreased noticeably which was followed by a sharp rise to 140
million
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 in 1996. To the
last
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 of the
period
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 in 2000, the production levels of
petroleum
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 climbed slightly and peaked at 142
million
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tonnes
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 - one of the biggest levels in 3 kinds of fuels.
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, the proportion of natural gas increased minimally and remained unchanged at around 39 to 40
million
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tonnes
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. In the next 5 years,
this
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 data
also
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 witnessed a dramatic growth of 43
million
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tonnes
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 but later rose slightly by 101
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.
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, the date of coal
also
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 started at 80
million
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tonnes
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,
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 but later dropped remarkably and hit a bottom at 38
million
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tonnes
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. From 1986 to 1991,
this
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 figure for coal
maintained
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was maintained
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 at around 60
million
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, which led to
fluctuate
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 at around 60
million
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 in
next
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the next
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 5 years and declined slightly by 2
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, period, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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