The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. 

Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates three main kinds of fuel
petroleum
, coal and natural gas in the United Kingdom over the
period
of 19 years from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
, both the proportion of
petroleum
and natural gas witnessed upward trends
while
the figure for coal experienced a contrasting movement over the given
period
. The amount of energy produced by
petroleum
started at 95
million
tonnes
of oil,
then
decreased noticeably which was followed by a sharp rise to 140
million
in 1996. To the
last
of the
period
in 2000, the production levels of
petroleum
climbed slightly and peaked at 142
million
tonnes
- one of the biggest levels in 3 kinds of fuels.
In addition
, the proportion of natural gas increased minimally and remained unchanged at around 39 to 40
million
tonnes
. In the next 5 years,
this
data
also
witnessed a dramatic growth of 43
million
tonnes
but later rose slightly by 101
million
tonnes
in 2000.
Finally
, the date of coal
also
started at 80
million
tonnes
,
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but later dropped remarkably and hit a bottom at 38
million
tonnes
. From 1986 to 1991,
this
figure for coal
maintained
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at around 60
million
, which led to
fluctuate
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at around 60
million
in
next
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5 years and declined slightly by 2
million
tonnes
at the end
of the
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, period, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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