The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries . summarise the information and write at least 150 words

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the

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of individuals who are 65 and above in three nations from 1940 to 2040.

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, the graph shows the proportion of Japan,

Sweden

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, and the

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. The country with the most elderly people is the

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in 2040, by 30%. Japan had the lowest

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among other countries in 1940; the rate of people was 5%, but it increased in 2025 to 10%,

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to 25% in 2040. On one hand, the ratio of individuals in

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was lower than 10% in 1940, and it increased by 5% each year until it reached 25% in 2040.

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, the

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has the same

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Sweden

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; expect that between 1980 and 2020, the rito was staple by 15%, but in 2025 it increased until it reached 30% in 2040.

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, Japan had the lowest

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of aged people in 1940.

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have the most rito of old individuals by 30%.

Sweden

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is similar to the

USA

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in some years.

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