The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries . summarise the information and write at least 150 words
The graph
illustrate
the Change the verb form
illustrates
percentage
of individuals who are 65 and above in three nations from 1940 to 2040.
Overall
, the graph shows the proportion of Japan, Sweden
, and the USA
. The country with the most elderly people is the USA
in 2040, by 30%.
Japan had the lowest percentage
among other countries in 1940; the rate of people was 5%, but it increased in 2025 to 10%, then
to 25% in 2040.
On one hand, the ratio of individuals in Sweden
was lower than 10% in 1940, and it increased by 5% each year until it reached 25% in 2040.
On the other hand
, the USA
has the same percentage
as Sweden
; expect that between 1980 and 2020, the rito was staple by 15%, but in 2025 it increased until it reached 30% in 2040.
To sum up
, Japan had the lowest percentage
of aged people in 1940. USA
have the most rito of old individuals by 30%. Sweden
is similar to the USA
in some years.Submitted by roof.al1418 on
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