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Nowadays, there are many reasons environmental pollution. What are causes and solution?

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These days, there are a lot of reasons for the environmental
pollution
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causes
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environmental
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 are
people
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 do not dump
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at
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 the right place, and the
government
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 cannot manage
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wastes
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 properly. The solutions to
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people
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wastes
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 at the right place, and the
government
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 should take necessary steps to manage those
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environment
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pollution
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 is
people
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wastes
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 properly.
People
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 everywhere
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 their wishes. They do not want to maintain laws to keep
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 clean.
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, the
government
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 properly.
Wastes
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 remain in the same places for a long
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time which
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environmental
pollution
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. City councils do not come regularly to remove those
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, in Bangladesh, the city corporation of Dhaka
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 every day and that
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environmental
pollution
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wastes
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 at the
rights
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 place. If the public
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 not come forward, it is not possible to control the environmental
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Public
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 should take
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 their own
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, the
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 should take necessary measures to tackle the environmental
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. Laws should be passed and properly implemented to remove
wastes
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 timely to save the environment from
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, India has taken necessary measures to remove
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every day
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 evening which is helping to control
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environmental
pollution
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. In conclusion, the
causes
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environmental
pollution
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 are
people
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wastes
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waste
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 properly, and the
government
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 are not responsible
to control
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for controlling
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the
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environmental
pollution
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this
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people
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wastes
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waste
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 regularly, and the
government
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 should take necessary steps.
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coherence cohesion
Try varying your sentence structures to enhance fluency and readability. This can also help in maintaining the reader's interest.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments. This will make your essay more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion well.
task achievement
You have provided clear solutions corresponding to the identified problems, which shows a comprehensive task response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • ecological balance
  • air quality
  • waste management
  • biodegradable
  • environmental regulations
  • fossil fuels
  • ozone layer
  • climate change
  • biodiversity
  • industrial emissions
  • contaminants
  • ecosystem
  • public transportation
  • deforestation
  • recycling programs
  • eco-friendly products
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