The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.

The diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production.
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The illustration presents the process of
honey
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manufacturing in a small-sized commercial production.
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, there are
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of different stages that ensure that the
honey
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is properly collected and sent to the
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stage where it is processed and prepared for selling. These include gathering honeycombs, filtering, and distribution. The first stage of the process starts with the bee stage, where nectar collected by bees
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transformed into
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and,
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, is deposited into a special construction.
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, bees dry the substance with their wings and they make sure the cells are kept clean. The human phase starts with
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honey comb
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gathering, which
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through a process called pressing combs and , eventually,
honey
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flows through a faucet. Collected product is,
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, poured into a sump tank and is filtered through a sieve tank which ensures that the dirt is removed, and after that, it settles for 2-4 days. The product is poured into jars and transported for commercialization.
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