The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The diagrams depict a table and a pie chart illustrating the Britain
police
revenue and expense
in 2017 and 2018. The table showing where the income Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
come
from has 3 categories, national Change the verb form
comes
government
, local tax, and other source
. Change the wording
another source
other sources
On the other hand
, the pie chart indicating where the police
spend for
has 3 categories, salaries, technology, and buildings and transport. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the biggest revenue came from national
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the national
government
. On the other hand
, the largest expense
was salaries for officers and staff. About the income of this
institution, the quantity of national
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the national
government
was in the number one position with over 170 million
pounds in 2017 and 2018. On the contrary
, the poicle
could not gain a profit much from other sources in both years with about 38 Correct your spelling
police
price
pole
million
. Moreover
, Local taxes was
moderate with about 90 Change the verb form
were
million
and 100million
. As for the Britain Correct your spelling
100 million
police
expense
, salaries had Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
the
huge ratio in the total spending with around 70% in two years. Correct article usage
a
additionally
, the minimum expense
was technology with under 15%. Buildings and transport were in second position with exactly 17％. To sum up
, the police
institution earns the budget from national
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the national
government
mainly, however
, they spend their budgets for
Change preposition
on
wage
mostly.Fix the agreement mistake
wages
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