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Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For all people,
transport
 is critical in their lives.
However
, it is argued that more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than public
transport
 systems. In my opinion, spending more money on public
transport
 is more crucial because of the more passengers it takes, increases the physical motion, and it reduces the
carpon
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carbon
 that
came
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comes
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 from
cars
.
To begin
 with, it's better to spend money on public transportation.
This
 is because having
good
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a good
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 public
transport
 system decreases the number of
cars
,
also
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and also
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 reduces traffic.
For example
, one bus could reduce 30
cars
 on
roads
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the roads
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 which
reduce
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reduces
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 many
cars
in
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on
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 the road.
In addition
, public transportation increases
the
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apply
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physical activity. For the reason of walking to catch a bus or the metro
instead
 of driving a car.
For instance
, walking into the bus station for 1
killo
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kills
kilo
 each day
this
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apply
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will
increases
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increase
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 the rate of physical activity during the day.
Furthermore
, public
transport
 is friendly for the earth.
This
 is because
less
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fewer
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cars
 on roads leads to
reduce
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reduced
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carbons
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carbon
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on
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in
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sky
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the sky
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,
this
 is
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a positve
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positve
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positive
 impact
for
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on
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climet
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climate
 change.
For example
, recent research by the University of Prince Sultan (PSU) has shown that 90% of the cities
who
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that
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depened
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depend
depended
 on public
transport
 are better in the
clearity
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clarity
on
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of
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weather
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the weather
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. In conclusion, increasing investment in public
transport
 is important because it will allocate more individuals, increase physical activity and decrease the pollution in the
wether
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weather
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.
Lastly
, good public
transport
 is really important for people I hope the government allocate more funds for it.
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