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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#anthropology #graduates #university #course #salaries #anthropologists #work #five #years #information #features #comparisons
THE
CHART
 COMPARES DESTINATION OF
ANTROPLOGY
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ANTHROPOLOGY
GRADUATES
 AFTER FINISHING THEIR UNDERGRADUATE DEGREE,
WHILE
TABLE
 SHOWS SALARIES OF
GRADUATES
 IN THREE VARIOUS SECTORS AFTER FIVE YEARS.
OVERALL
,
IT IS CLEAR THAT
 IN
PIE
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THE PIE
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CHART
 ALMOST HALF OF UNDERGRADUATES
EMPLOYED
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ARE EMPLOYED
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 IN FULL-TIME
WORK
.
HOWEVER
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HOWEVER,
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 FROM THE
TABLE
, HALF OF
GRADUATES
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THE GRADUATES
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 WHO
WORK
 IN
GOVERNMENT
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THE GOVERNMENT
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 SECTOR GET
SALARY
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A SALARY
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MORE
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OF MORE
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 THAN 100.000 DOLLARS. IN TERMS OF
PIE
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THE PIE
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CHART
, LESS OVER THE HALF OF STUDENTS WORKED IN FULL-TIME
WORK
,
WHILE
 THE PERCENTAGES OF UNEMPLOYED AND PART-TIME
WORK
 OVER
THE
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apply
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ONE
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TENTH, AT 12% AND 15% RESPECTIVELY. STUDENTS WHO WORKED
IN
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apply
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FULL-TIME ACCOUNTED FOR 8% AND THE SAME FIGURE WAS OBSERVED IN
NOT
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THE NOT
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 KNOWN AND 5% PIE
CHART
 DERIVED FROM POSTGRADUATES WHO
EMPLOYED
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WERE EMPLOYED
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 IN
PART- TIME
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PART-TIME
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WORK
. TURNING TO THE
TABLE
,
SALARY
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THE SALARY
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 OF
GRADUATES
 WHO WORKED IN
GOVERNMENT
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THE GOVERNMENT
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 SECTOR WAS MORE THAN 100.000 DOLLARS, WHICH LEAD THE
TABLE
 JUST
BEING
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AT 50%,
COMPARING
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COMPARED
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 TO FREELANCE CONSULTANTS AT 40%.
BY
CONTRAST
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CONTRAST,
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 PRIVATE COMPANIES
WAS
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WERE
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 THE LEAST FAVOURED AT 30%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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