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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an ongoing debate over whether the commuting
week
 should be decreased.
This
 tendency results in workers having a longer
weekend
.
However
 it leads to mitigation in
economy
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, I mostly agree that shorter
week
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 ought to be implemented. Admittedly, a reduced working
time
 has a profound impact on the economy. One of the obvious reasons is that it might contribute to a decline in output: as employment
time
 is shorter, which leads to the growing production
time
.
For example
, furniture companies manufacture their products during an ordinary workweek, and any modifications could lead to negative consequences.
However
, a shorter working
week
 might increase productivity, since employees are less likely to experience depression and fatigue. They would carry out their job by the deadline with more motivation;
as a result
, it not only fosters production rate but
also
 enhances their desire to perform. It goes to say that, with a longer
weekend
, workers can relax, spend
time
 with their family and pursue hobbies, which is able to improve considerably their mental health. As long as they have accomplished their
weekend
 plan, they
would become
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 concentrate on their jobs.
For instance
, every mother is more likely to devote their
time
 to their children,and a shorter
week
 sounds good under a certain circumstance.
Further
 justification is that the number of commuting days might alleviate traffic congestion. Since more and more individuals rest at their homes, lower pollution levels can experienced. In conclusion, despite
a
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 increase in weekends leading to reduced production, I am of the opinion that it not only enhances worker's work-life balance but
also
 mitigates contamination in the country.The working
week
 should be shorter and workers should have a longer
weekend
. Do you agree or disagree?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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