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Maps gives information about City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Maps gives information about City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
#maps #information #city
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The maps illustrate
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Fix the agreement mistake
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 of the
city
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 which is called Hospital within 3 years, beginning from 2007.
Overall
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, there
took place
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are
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a
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apply
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great recommendations. The main changes for 2010 are adding new buildings and making changes
on
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to
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 road structure. In 2007,
City
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 Hospital did not include any roundabouts in its ways, but until 2010, two roundabouts were built and they were connected to the new bus station. In the past time, bus
stop
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stops
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 places located on the two sides of the Hospital road.
However
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, in 2010, they were converted into only one big bus station on the west side of the
city
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. Regarding Hospital location, there has
did
Verb problem
been
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 no alternation. It
still
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is still
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 located on the north side of the
city
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 Hospital.
Furthermore
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, three years ago,
car
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a car
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 park for staff and local people had been gathered.
And in
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In
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 2010, they were separated
two
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into two
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 sections: one of them was staff which was constructed past place of old car park and the second one was built on
flank
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the flank
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 side of the hospital for
public
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the public
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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