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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
illiteracy
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 levels in the world, by presenting different regions and
data
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 for each gender for the past year. The graph is spread into two categories, namely: the Developed
Countries
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, Latin American/ Caribbean and East
Asia
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/ Oceania, all presented a lower trend of
illiteracy
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, with a maximum of 20% rate.
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, the second category shows a growth in the trend of Sub-Saharian Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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illiteracy
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 levels, having a peak of
aproximately
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approximately
 55%. The largest gap in the
data
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 is between the women in Developed
Countries
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 and South
Asia
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, with
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 estimated 53% difference.
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, there are great differences between male and female
data
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 presented. There is at least a 16% drop in male
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 levels in the given regions,
besides
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 the
data
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 in Developed
Countries
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 and Latin America/ Caribbean, which does not present
significant
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 difference. South
Asia
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, having the highest numbers recorded for both
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 and
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 on the graph, still has a merely 20% difference in the recorded numbers.
Overall
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, the
data
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 given in the chart has significant fluctuations. Even though several trends of increasing or decreasing rates are visible, in the bigger picture, there are dramatic differences between the two categories of regions.n the evolved populated
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 significant increase in female
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percentage
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percentage

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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, data, countries, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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