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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate the modifications made to the design of West
Park
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 Secondary
School
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 over the span of 60 years(1950,1980 and 2010).
Overall
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, West
Park
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 Secondary
School
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 has undergone considerable changes during the given periods. Certain areas like houses and farmland have been replaced to accommodate new facilities
such
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 as a
car
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park
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, sports field and science block.
According to
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 the map in 1950, towards the north, houses and schools occupied the left and right and beneath it was farmland and playground on the southern side. In 1980, houses were converted into science blocks adjacent to the main building of the
school
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 and
car
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park
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.
Additionally
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, farmland was pulled down and made into sports fields.
However
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, there were more changes that occurred in 2010, the science block,
school
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 , and playground remained the same but the
car
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park
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 was extended by taking the half of sports field.
Car
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 parks took the most of the area by the year 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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