Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
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lot
of group
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groups
internet
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the internet
has
a risk Verb problem
poses
for
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to
public
. I completely Add an article
the public
agree
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agree on
agree to
agree with
this
idea.
Firstly
, internet
has many Add an article
the internet
news
channels and sites for public
but Add an article
the public
many
information is fake Correct quantifier usage
much
in
the Change preposition
on
internet
. In
addition
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addition,
these
fake Correct determiner usage
this
news
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could
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with each original Wrong verb form
eliminated
informations
. One Change the wording
information
pieces of information
politic
announced new law but Replace the word
politician
this
was a
fake Correct article usage
apply
new
, it was not only fake Correct your spelling
news
news
it is
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was
also
blaming
, The Wrong verb form
blamed
politic
fired and Replace the word
politician
media
was not Correct article usage
the media
showed
it. Many people strike Wrong verb form
show
government
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the government
due to
fake news
.
Secondly
, some illegal things happens
on the networks and many Change the verb form
happen
site
. Change to a plural noun
sites
Actually
these sites have a Add a comma
Actually,
lot
of harms
for people Fix the agreement mistake
harm
specially
children. Many guilty Replace the word
especially
person
can connect to children with Change to a plural noun
people
internet
. They do not only connect but Add an article
the internet
also
they
sell drugs, Correct pronoun usage
apply
guns
. Correct word choice
and guns
Polices
don't do anything about it because prisons have unknown Correct your spelling
Police
wi fi
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wi-fi
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has a Add an article
The Internet
lot
of group
. Child killer, Change to a plural noun
groups
drugseller
and many Correct your spelling
drug seller
drug sellers
mafia
. Everybody can assess everything easily.
Change to a plural noun
mafias
Finally
, our phones and computers take our time a lot
of with Correct article usage
the internet
internet
. Recently some applications Capitalize word
Internet
are
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have
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our times these applications not only Wrong verb form
measured
measuring
our times Wrong verb form
measure
also
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but also
they searching
which Wrong verb form
search
web sites
take Correct your spelling
websites
most
time on the phone.Add an article
the most
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
It is a relevant and important topic that you address with conviction.
task achievement
Good attempt at identifying multiple negative aspects of social networking sites.
coherence cohesion
The points presented are indeed thought-provoking and encourage deeper consideration of the impacts.
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