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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

#students #science #subjects #university #countries #effects #society
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In many nations these days, there is a decreasing
number
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 of
students
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 taking up
science
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subject
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subjects
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 in their
university
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universities
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. One of the probable causes is because of its difficulty, and
as a
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result
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 affecting the community as well. There are many reasons schoolers
does
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 not prefer
science
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subject
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, part of these is they have a hard time understanding topics related to
science
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.
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, not all
students
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 love grasping information about how something
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,
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process
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as well as
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 what makes a thing function.
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, learning about human anatomy as part of
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 course, aside from numerous names of body parts the
students
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 must remember, learners should
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 understand how each certain muscle or organ functions.
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, avoiding in enrolling
science
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 is one of their
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out
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to
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 with
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 difficult
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.
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, as
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 new generations continue to disregard
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subject
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,
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 when
in
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 comes to health,
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 affects society because of the declining
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 of individuals working in
a
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 medical field that
aid
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 people. In the end, there will be no sufficient medical
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 that can provide appropriate medical treatment to sick individuals.
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, in the Philippines, there is a decreasing
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 of professional doctors and nurses because most of them
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 in the educational and engineering field. So, as the
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 of healthcare workers
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, there will be an inclining
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 of people getting diseases. In conclusion, there are plenty of reasons why
students
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 opt to study different subjects except
science
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, one of these is they are not capable enough to acquire the topics covered in the subjects.
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, in the future time
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 the community which requires
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science-related interventions
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science
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-related interventions from different workers in the medical field.
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Clarify ideas in the response by using simpler sentence structures or breaking complex sentences into smaller parts.
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The essay appropriately addresses the task by identifying reasons and effects related to the declining interest in science subjects.
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An attempt is made to balance the discussion of reasons and effects, which is essential for complete task coverage.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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