Some people believe that radio is the best source to get news while other think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Ones believe that
radio
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is the best source
to
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receive
news
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while
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other
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opinion is that
television
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is better for
this
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purpose. Both channels have
its
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advantages,
as well as
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disadvantages.
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, it greatly depends on individual preferences. Both views will be discussed in more
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below. On the one hand,
radio
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is
more
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convenient source of information.
Firstly
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, the majority of
radio
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stations announce
news
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more frequently than on
TV
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.
For example
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, you can listen to the latest updates every hour, or sometimes even every half an hour.
Secondly
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,
radio
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can be used more widely in
every day
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life compared to
TV
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.
For instance
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, you can listen to it
while
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driving the car, travelling by bus or even at work.
On the other hand
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,
although
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television
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news
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are
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not announced
so
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frequently as
radio
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news
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, the first ones are usually longer and
has
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more explicit information.
In addition
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, the audience gets visual information that strengthens the impression.
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, watching
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news
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on
TV
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is a part of an evening routine for some folks.
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, people usually are not able to watch
TV
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in the car or at work. In my opinion,
radio
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is
better
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a better
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channel to get
news
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compared to
television
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.
Radio
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can be used more widely and
news
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are
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is
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announced more often.
However
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, it's not arguable, that
television
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news
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have
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greater
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a greater
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impact
due to
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visual effects. It is worth
to mention
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mentioning
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that there are
news
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channels on both,
TV
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and
radio
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, where people can listen
or
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to or
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watch
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news
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the news
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all day long, so everyone can choose based on
own
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their own
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taste.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a more varied range of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Ensure your arguments are supported with more detailed examples to strengthen the task response.
Task Achievement
Make sure to present a clearer distinction between your own opinion and the discussion of both views.
Task Achievement
You have effectively provided a balanced discussion of both views, illustrating different perspectives on the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical flow of ideas, with a clear introduction and conclusion that wrap up the discussion nicely.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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