Some people believe that radio is the best source to get news while other think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Ones believe that
radio
is the best source
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
receive
news
while
other
Change the wording
another
show examples
opinion is that
television
is better for
this
purpose. Both channels have
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
advantages,
as well as
disadvantages.
Moreover
, it greatly depends on individual preferences. Both views will be discussed in more
detailed
Replace the word
detail
show examples
below. On the one hand,
radio
is
more
Add an article
a more
show examples
convenient source of information.
Firstly
, the majority of
radio
stations announce
news
more frequently than on
TV
.
For example
, you can listen to the latest updates every hour, or sometimes even every half an hour.
Secondly
,
radio
can be used more widely in
every day
Replace the word
everyday
show examples
life compared to
TV
.
For instance
, you can listen to it
while
driving the car, travelling by bus or even at work.
On the other hand
,
although
television
news
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
not announced
so
Correct word choice
as
show examples
frequently as
radio
news
, the first ones are usually longer and
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
more explicit information.
In addition
, the audience gets visual information that strengthens the impression.
Moreover
, watching
news
Add an article
the news
show examples
on
TV
is a part of an evening routine for some folks.
However
, people usually are not able to watch
TV
in the car or at work. In my opinion,
radio
is
better
Add an article
a better
show examples
channel to get
news
compared to
television
.
Radio
can be used more widely and
news
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
announced more often.
However
, it's not arguable, that
television
news
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
greater
Correct article usage
a greater
show examples
impact
due to
visual effects. It is worth
to mention
Change the verb form
mentioning
show examples
that there are
news
channels on both,
TV
and
radio
, where people can listen
or
Change preposition
to or
show examples
watch
news
Add an article
the news
show examples
all day long, so everyone can choose based on
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
show examples
taste.
Submitted by rasav on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a more varied range of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Ensure your arguments are supported with more detailed examples to strengthen the task response.
Task Achievement
Make sure to present a clearer distinction between your own opinion and the discussion of both views.
Task Achievement
You have effectively provided a balanced discussion of both views, illustrating different perspectives on the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical flow of ideas, with a clear introduction and conclusion that wrap up the discussion nicely.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: