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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart give information about the relationship between age and crime
as well as
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 the types of crimes in the UK in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, the line graph illustrates that the frequencies of committing crimes were found more in the young communities compared to the aged ones. There were four types of illegal acts including violent misconduct, property, drug, and public order crime. Among these violent acts were the most common
whereas
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 the levels of property and drug violence were close to each other. From the first figure,
it is clear that
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 the utmost offence was done by the population aged from 12 to 24, especially eighty thousand people of age 20 who were the highest number who involved themselves in committing misdeed. The rate of infringement was in a decreasing trend
while
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 the age was increasing with the X-axis.
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, in the pie chart, 46 per
cent
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 of unlawful acts were done by violation
whereas
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 only 9 per
cent
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 of people were involved in public order crimes. Since the rates were 22 per
cent
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 and 23 per
cent
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 for drug and property violations respectively, the intensity was almost the same.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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