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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pictures
depicts
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depict
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 data about the production of frozen
fish
 pies.
Overall
,the first one presents
structure
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the structure
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 of a
fish
 pie, and the second one shows
a
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the
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 working process of
production
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a production
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 line which
divides
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is divided
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 into several stages.
Firstly
,
fish
 pie
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is stores
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stores
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 in a microwaveable container and has
poatoes
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potatoes
 on
the
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apply
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top.
While
, sauce, peas and
cutted
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cut
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fish
 are mixed and located under sliced potatoes.
Secondly
, production is divided into
pototoes
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potatoes
 and salmon. Potatoes
is
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are
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 delivered and
conducts
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collected
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 after cleaning, peeling and slicing,
then
 it is boiled and
cheel
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collected
 after it. At the same moment, salmon is delivered and mixed with lemon juice and salt. After
it
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it is cooked in
steam
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a steam
the steam
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 oven, next time special people remove
skin
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the skin
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 and bones
out of
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apply
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that
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apply
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,
also
, it is checked by
inspector
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an inspector
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. In the final stage, it is combined with prepared peas,sauce and potatoes and
wraped
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wrapped
, after it , it is
freezed
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frozen
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 and delivered
into
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to
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store
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a store
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 or
dispatch
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dispatched
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "divides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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