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The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph provides information about
transport
modes
 in
european
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European
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city
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cities
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 by bus,
car
, bike and foot in 1960, 1980, and 2000.
Overall
, there were fluctuation percentages between the three
transport
modes
 in 1960, 1980, and 2000. Bus was a mode of transportation that was always used with high frequency throughout the years. The
percentage
 of the using of bus was always above 15%. It was not like
another
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other
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transport
modes
 which had
percentage
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a percentage
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 under 10% throughout the years.
Car
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The car
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 had the highest
percentage
 of
another
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other
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transport
modes
. The
percentage
 of
car
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cars
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 was above 35% in 2000. But the
percentage
downward
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fell to
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 under 25% in 1980.
Then
 became the lowest
precentage
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percentage
 in 1960.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand,
bike
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bikes
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 had about 20% to 25% between 1960
until
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and
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 1980.
However
 the lowest
percentage
 of
bike
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bikes
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 was 5% in 2000, it
had
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was
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 the same
percentage
with
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as
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car
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cars
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 in 1960.
Foot
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The foot
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 was almost had
percentage
 with
car
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the car
a car
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 in 1960. It was almost
to
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apply
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35%.
Then
 the lowest
percentage
 of foot as
transport
 mode was under 10% in 2000. They were the years opposed to the highest and lowest
percentage
 of cars.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, modes, car, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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