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The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates different types of vehicles which were used in European cities over the 40 years.
Overall
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, the bus was used by a great number of people all the year with a little decrease,
while
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 car use increased dramatically year by year. To look at details, the bus was a dominant transportation type in three years with a decrease in 2000.
On the other hand
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, car use went up by 35% in 2000, even though it started with only 5% in 1960 .
Moreover
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although
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 it is a healthy and cheaper way of travelling, bike riding went down by 5% in 2000.
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, despite the fact that travelling by foot improves leg muscles, the number of people who walked on foot dropped by 9% in 2000.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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