In the past, many male leaders had led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it were ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Since old times, history has witnessed many battles and wars, often led by male
leaders
. Because of this
, there is a view that if women
were chosen as leaders
, it would help the world
become better administered and harmonious. I totally disagree with this
view, since I think conflicts and violence should not be linked to a particular gender and moving to women
alone will not make the world
a better place to live.
First and foremost, let's not consider leadership as gender specific, so are conflicts and violence. Although
most men are of high temperament and prone to altercation and confrontation as compared to women
, this
is not the universal truth. There are women
who can be as ferocious. While
we have examples of Hitler starting World
War 2, we also
have Margaret Thatcher (Iron Lady) infamous for war. A very recent example is Indira Gandhi, who had aggressively declared an emergency in India and violently handled an insurgency in the 1980s. These illustrate that confining bloodshed alone to men is not historically correct. Thus
, we are not completely sure if the world
would be better governed and more peaceful if it were ruled by women
.
Additionally
, we not only need wonderful leaders
working on overall
development in areas of governance, education, infrastructure, freedom, and job employment but also
need a proactive and supportive team, to make the world
peaceful. This
leader can be a man or woman, but needs to have good qualities and values. We have an example of Nilson Mendala, Nobel Peace Prize, who has struggled against slavery and discrimination against blacks in South Africa. Recently, we have a new woman Prime minister in New Zealand, who spoke about compassion and inclusivity. To work efficiently, these leaders
need all-around support for each and every aspect of running a country, hence
the support staff goals should also
be aligned toward a non-violent and conflict-free world
.
In summary, to say women
leaders
alone can make society serene is too much of an ask, I totally disagree with this
notion and believe that a person with strong leadership qualities, and supportive staff are needed to make this
a reality. Thus
, with any gender bias, I feel there is a need for a strong and peace-loving person to lead and make the world
pleasant and war-fee again.Submitted by mbasheerdange on
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task achievement
Ensure to address the task more comprehensively by exploring different perspectives and providing a more balanced view. Discuss instances where both men and women have contributed positively to peace.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has a clear logical structure, further improvement can be achieved by ensuring each paragraph flows seamlessly into the next. Consider using more cohesive devices.
introduction conclusion
The essay effectively presents a clear introduction, outlining the main points of disagreement.
task achievement
Provided relevant historical examples such as Hitler, Margaret Thatcher, and Nelson Mandela to support the arguments.
task achievement
Engaged with the task comprehensively by addressing gender roles and leadership qualities, backed by historical and modern examples.
introduction conclusion
Conclusion is well-reasoned and reinforces the main position that leadership should be based on qualities and not gender.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
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