The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
depicts
destinations
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the destinations
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of Anthropology
graduates
after completing their undergraduate degree program,
while
the table provides information on
percentage
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the percentage
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of salary brackets for three types of
employment
– freelance consulting, government sector and private companies.
It is clear that
major
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a major
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portion of the
graduates
found
employment
, both full and part-time.
On the other hand
,
combination
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a combination
the combination
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of working part-time and pursuing postgrad study has the lowest percentage in the
chart
. In terms of salaries,
government
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the government
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sector has the highest earning potential,
following
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followed
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by freelance consultancy and
with
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apply
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private companies trailing behind. Looking more closely at the bar
chart
, we can see that about half of
graduates
, 52%, found full-time
employment
,
following
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followed
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by 15% working part-time.
By contrast
,
portion
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a portion
the portion
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of unemployed
graduates
constituted 8%. Interestingly,
destination
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the destination
a destination
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of 8% of
graduates
was unknown, and only 5% of the
chart
accounts for anthropologists
that
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who
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worked part-time
while
doing postgrad study.
According to
the table,
majority
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the majority
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of anthropology
graduates
earned more than
USD
75,000 after 5
years’
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years
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work
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of work
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. Out of the three
employment
types,
government
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the government
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sector is the one with the highest remuneration - 50% of its anthropologists had a salary of
USD
100,000 and higher.
By contrast
, private companies were paying less, the largest portion, 35
percent
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per cent
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, earned between
USD
50,000 and
USD
75,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, graduates, employment, usd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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