The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps illustrate the organization of West

Park

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Secondary School from 1950 to 2010.

Overall

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, the area has been improved and become more comfortable for education by adding several new buildings. As shown in the maps,

firstly

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, from 1950 to 1980 the school increased. A new science block

instead

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apply

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three houses made the area better.

Moreover

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, there was a brand new car

park

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near

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apply

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the laboratory. A farmland was replaced by a sports field. At

this

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moment the school building

become

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becomes

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the main of

this

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complex.

Secondly

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, from 1980 to 2010 the car

park

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took the biggest part of the area, where earlier had been the sports field and the car

park

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. The main building and the science block hadn’t changed.

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, the playground had decreased by adding the new small sports field.

Finally

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, for

this

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huge period of

time

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time,

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only one place did not change. It was a main road next to the complex.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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expansion
modernization
infrastructure
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demolition
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