The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The maps illustrate the organization of West
Park
Secondary School from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
, the area has been improved and become more comfortable for education by adding several new buildings. As shown in the maps,
firstly
, from 1950 to 1980 the school increased. A new science block
instead
of
a
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three houses made the area better.
Moreover
, there was a brand new car
park
near
to
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the laboratory. A farmland was replaced by a sports field. At
this
moment the school building
become
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the main of
this
complex.
Secondly
, from 1980 to 2010 the car
park
took the biggest part of the area, where earlier had been the sports field and the car
park
. The main building and the science block hadn’t changed.
However
, the playground had decreased by adding the new small sports field.
Finally
, for
this
huge period of
time
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only one place did not change. It was a main road next to the complex.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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