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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 argue that the negative influence of Tourism
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local residents and natural landscapes has experienced a significant rise over the
last
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 50 years.
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However
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 others wouldn't
eager
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 to welcome
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this
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 point of view. Looking
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 at the detrimental points, it can have a negative effect on the natural environment.
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 means that
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building
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 of facilities and infrared has
been
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destroyed the habitats of wild animals
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 as cutting down trees and
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 spaces where they are living .
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Furthermore
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 a rise in the cost of living
effects
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host families negatively. The more the number of migrants growth who are coming as
a travelers
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a traveler
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, the more the price of goods, services and housing may soar remarkably. The poor persons become a good example there because some
people
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 some things
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buy
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an expensive items
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expensive items
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 or
eat
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 out in
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restaurants.
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 , there are several benefits of tourism to the government. First and foremost
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travelers go on holidays to relax and have fun. That means that
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they spend money
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accommodations and tourist attractions and other facilities. And not only
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 but
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 creates employment in services like housing, transport and food.
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addition
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 these
factor
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 lead to improve the standard of living and contribute
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 financial ways to improve the industry of government. As long as the country
become
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 more popular and wealthier,
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 local residents
also
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 will live a better life. In conclusion
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people
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 have
a different views
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different views
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 about tourism, but I believe it has more advantages for the city and
people
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 equally.

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relevant specific examples
Ensure all main points are supported with specific examples. Try to detail real-life instances to reinforce your points.
complete response
Address the question more comprehensively by providing a balanced view of both sides before stating your opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on clarity by organizing ideas logically and ensuring sentences flow smoothly for better comprehension.
introduction conclusion present
The essay introduces both sides of the argument effectively and concludes with a clear personal opinion.
supported main points
Several potential negative and positive impacts of tourism are identified, providing a balanced discussion.
logical structure
The essay showcases good effort in integrating complex ideas related to the economic and social aspects of tourism.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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