Task 2 Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.
Some accommodations and tourist attractions and other facilities. And not only
people
argue that the negative influence of Tourism with
local residents and natural landscapes has experienced a significant rise over the Change preposition
on
last
50 years. However
others wouldn't Add a comma
However,
eager
to welcome Add a missing verb
be eager
with
Change preposition
apply
this
point of view.
Looking firstly
at the detrimental points, it can have a negative effect on the natural environment. This
means that ,
Remove the comma
apply
building
of facilities and infrared has Add an article
the building
been
destroyed the habitats of wild animals Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as cutting down trees and burn
spaces where they are living . Replace the word
burning
Furthermore
a rise in the cost of livingAdd a comma
Furthermore,
effects
host families negatively. The more the number of migrants growth who are coming as Correct your spelling
affects
a travelers
, the more the price of goods, services and housing may soar remarkably. The poor persons become a good example there because some Correct the article-noun agreement
a traveler
travelers
people
can't effort
some things Verb problem
afford
such
as buy
Wrong verb form
buying
an expensive items
orCorrect the article-noun agreement
expensive items
an expensive item
eat
out in Wrong verb form
eating
the
restaurants.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, there are several benefits of tourism to the government. First and foremost the
travelers go on holidays to relax and have fun. That means that Correct article usage
apply
,
they spend moneyRemove the comma
apply
Change preposition
on
this
but this
creates employment in services like housing, transport and food. In
addition
theseAdd a comma
addition,
factor
lead to improve the standard of living and contribute Change the determiner
factors
with
financial ways to improve the industry of government. As long as the country Change preposition
to
become
more popular and wealthier, Change the verb form
becomes
then
local residents also
will live a better life.
In conclusionAdd a comma
,
people
have a different views
about tourism, but I believe it has more advantages for the city and Correct the article-noun agreement
different views
a different view
people
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relevant specific examples
Ensure all main points are supported with specific examples. Try to detail real-life instances to reinforce your points.
complete response
Address the question more comprehensively by providing a balanced view of both sides before stating your opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on clarity by organizing ideas logically and ensuring sentences flow smoothly for better comprehension.
introduction conclusion present
The essay introduces both sides of the argument effectively and concludes with a clear personal opinion.
supported main points
Several potential negative and positive impacts of tourism are identified, providing a balanced discussion.
logical structure
The essay showcases good effort in integrating complex ideas related to the economic and social aspects of tourism.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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