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The lie chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages on addition to english, in 2000 and 2010.

The lie chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages on addition to english, in 2000 and 2010.
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 the number of
students
 who studied at a university in England and could speak languages other than
english
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English
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 over
two
 years.
Overall
, we observe that
students
 with
spanish
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Spanish
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language
 knowledge showed an
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upward
 trend in both years.
In addition
,
two
 other languages and
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the german
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german
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German
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language
 remained stable in
two
 years. To look at details,
firstly
,
it is clear that
 the proportion of
students
 who spoke
spanish
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Spanish
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 hit the highest point in 2000
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 30% and it was followed by no other
language
with
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 20%.
Moreover
,
two
 other languages and
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the german
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german
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German
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language
 followed similar patterns with 10%. On the other side, another
language
 and
french
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French
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 were spoken by the same number of youngsters with 15%.
On the other hand
 , there were some differences in 2010. To start with,
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the spanish
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spanish
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Spanish
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language
 which
preffered
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preferred
 by 35% of
adolsents
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adolescents
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 the highest rate in 2010 as well.
Although
,
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 the per cent of the
students
 who were able to speak another
language
 was 15%, it went up by 20% in 2010.
Additionally
, apart from the range of
the
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youngsters who could speak
spanish
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Spanish
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 and another
language
, others shared
same
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the same
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 proportions with 10% in 2010.
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