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The bar chart shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart demonstrates
a
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survey results whereby how many people drink
coffee
 and
tea
 in different ways
percentagewise
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percentage-wise
 in 5 Australian countries:
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
 and
Hobart
. It is,
overall
, apparent that those who went to
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
 and
tea
 showed the highest proportion in all countries except
Adelaide
, with instant
coffee
 drinking being the most popular choice.
Furthermore
, drinking fresh
coffee
 was the least common preference among the same given countries. Looking at fresh
coffee
 drinking
first,
survey participants who bought fresh
coffee
 in
Sydney
 accounted for less than 45%, being the
the
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highest in
this
 regard. A
figure
 for fresh
coffee
 in
Melbourne
 made up roughly 42%, about 3
percent
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 higher than that of
Hobart
. 34% of
Adelaide
 residents opted for fresh
coffee
 in
last
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 4 weeks, followed by
Brisbane
 at 33%. When it comes to instant
coffee
 sales, figures were much higher than the previous one. In
Hobart
, people
bought
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 instant
coffee
 constituted slightly less than 55%, taking the lead in fresh
coffee
 drinking. That was a bit lower in
Brisbane
, at about 53%. Interestingly, fresh
coffee
 in
Adelaide
 showed the highest
figure
although
 the percentage of
Brisbane
 and and
Hobart
 in
this
 regard was higher.
This
figure
 stood at just below and above 47% in
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
, respectively. As far as cafe visits for
coffee
 and
tea
 are concerned, 60-64%
people
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of people
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 went to a cafe in order to drink
coffee
 and
tea
 in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
. The
figure
 accounted for slightly more than 55% and less than 50% in
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
, proportionally.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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