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The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table beneath
represent
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 a US bus firm data between 1999, and 2003. I will elaborate on it
further
 in the following paragraphs.
Overall
, as we can see in 1999,
performance
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the performance
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 of
bus
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buses
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 arriving on time was
highest
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the highest
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 and the number of
complaints
 from passengers
were
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was
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 lowest
while
 the minimum
complaints
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number of complaints
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 were in 2003.
To begin
 with ,in 1999 as
mention
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mentioned
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 earlier arriving time of
bus
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the bus
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 was
best
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the best
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among
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of
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 all years, (80% completing its
target
 ) .Moving ahead,in 2000
performance
 was least( around 30% )not fulfilling that
target
 of
approximate
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approximately
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 45%
while
 in 2001 and 2000
to
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apply
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the score, and the
target
was
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were
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 pretty much
same
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the same
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 (around 40% )achieving the
target
 . Probing ahead in 2003, the
performance
 was higher than
target
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the target
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 (
performance
 = 80% and
target
 = 35% ).
Therefore
, in 1999 there
was
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were
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least
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the least
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complain
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complaints
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.In 2000 and 2001 there were almost similar
number
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numbers
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 of
complaints
 (more than 20 ). Moving
further
 ,100
complaints
 were registered in 2002 .Talking about 2003
although
 arriving time was approx 80%
but
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apply
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there were maximum
complaints
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number of complaints
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 reported in that year (around 120. )
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Vocabulary: Replace the words performance, complaints, target with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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