The table gives information about the employment of university graduates in the U.S. in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about the employment

of university graduates in the U.S. in 2005.

Summarize the information by selecting and

reporting the main features, and make comparisons

where relevant.
The table chart illustrates information about the three types of
employees
of university graduates in New York, Chicago, San Francisco, and Los
Angles
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Angeles
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in 2005.
Overall
, among the percentage of total
employment
, New York had the maximum
number
of university graduate
employees
. In four cities, the proportion of Overseas
employment
is the lowest. Except in Chicago, the
number
of permanent
employees
is far more than the
figure
of
employees
who are temporarily employed.
According to
the graph, New York has the
most
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highest
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number
of
employees
in total of the three types of jobs, at 60%. The companies have the highest percentage of permanent
employment
among the four cities, at 55%. The
number
of
temporarily
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temporary
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employees
is far less than that
figure
, only at 8.7% And
this
situation of permanent and temporary
employment
in San Francisco and Los Angeles has happened the same.
By contrast
, the most special
employment
condition has appeared in Chicago. The proportion of temporary
employment
has the highest
figure
compared with other countries in
this
category, at 36.3%, which is more than the
number
of permanent
employees
.
Furthermore
, in four countries. The percentage of overseas
employment
both had the lowest
figure
and the highest
number
is no more than 5%.
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