The table gives information about the employment of university graduates in the U.S. in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates information about the three types of
employees
of university graduates in New York, Chicago, San Francisco, and Los Angles
in 2005.
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Angeles
Overall
, among the percentage of total employment
, New York had the maximum number
of university graduate employees
. In four cities, the proportion of Overseas employment
is the lowest. Except in Chicago, the number
of permanent employees
is far more than the figure
of employees
who are temporarily employed.
According to
the graph, New York has the most
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highest
number
of employees
in total of the three types of jobs, at 60%. The companies have the highest percentage of permanent employment
among the four cities, at 55%. The number
of temporarily
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temporary
employees
is far less than that figure
, only at 8.7% And this
situation of permanent and temporary employment
in San Francisco and Los Angeles has happened the same.
By contrast
, the most special employment
condition has appeared in Chicago. The proportion of temporary employment
has the highest figure
compared with other countries in this
category, at 36.3%, which is more than the number
of permanent employees
.
Furthermore
, in four countries. The percentage of overseas employment
both had the lowest figure
and the highest number
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