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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares data about
yearly
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the yearly
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 productivity of
milk
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 in 4 countries,mainly
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia,
Tanzania
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 and
Guatemala
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 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 people in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 got more
milk
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 than other countries
in
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during
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all
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apply
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the period.
Moreover
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,the least amount of
milk
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 was in
the
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apply
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Guatemala
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. At the outset,
although
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 Guatemalans had 26 thousand
litres
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 of
milk
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 in 1990, 11262000
litres
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 of product
was
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were
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 in the
Netherlands
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.
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, if Australians produced about 11.25 million
litres
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, 87.000
litres
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was
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were
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 in
Tanzania
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 in 1990. 55 thousand L of
milk
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 was in
the
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apply
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Guatemala
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,though over 11.1 million
litres
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were producted
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producted
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produced
Netherland's
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Netherlands's
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 people.
Nonetheless
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,in 2000 citizens of
Tanzania
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 and Australia produced 142.000 and 11.105.000 L respectively.
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, if Australians got about 9.2 mln
litres
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 in 2010, approximately 11.5 mln was in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the
period
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period,
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 Humans in
Tanzania
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 created 155 thousand
litres
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 of
milk
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,though 84.000
litres
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 was in
Guatemala
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands, tanzania, guatemala, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual production
  • country comparison
  • decade analysis
  • fluctuations
  • overall trends
  • increasing/decreasing trends
  • peak production
  • relatively higher/lower
  • production volume
  • significant growth/decrease
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