Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside.

There are
people
who argue that
live
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living
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in
cities
are
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is
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more enjoyable than in
countryside
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the countryside
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. Actually, the advantage of living in a city is
people
can access anything easily
while
different when they live in
a
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the
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countryside. On the other side, the merit of living in a rural area is
people
far from
air
pollution. First
thing
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things
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first,
living in
cities
make
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makes
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people
can go anywhere they want and do anything. There are a lot of public transportation,
school
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schools
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,
mall
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malls
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, and many more. Not only that, but
also
the accessibility to
internet
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the internet
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possible
people
to search
jobs
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for jobs
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and find
many
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apply
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important
informations
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information
.
For instance
, since I was a child until now, I have never
experience
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experienced
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a lack of internet signal.
Furthermore
, I can apply to a good university
that
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apply
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located in a city.
Nevertheless
,
live
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living
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in
city
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a city
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sometimes dangerous for
people
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people's
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respiration because of
bad
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the bad
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quality of the
air
. There are many vehicles that still use fossil
fuel
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fuels
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which is emitting
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
.
Then
, when
human
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humans
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inhale
this
gas excessively, they will get sick.
However
,
people
can still manage it by using
mask
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masks
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or
reduce
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reducing
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the
using
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use
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of private
vehicle
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vehicles
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. To illustrate, in Australia, the government reduce
air
pollution by encouraging
people
to use mass transportation.
To conclude
, in
cities
,
people
are
facilitated
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provided
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with many facilitations
while
the quality of
its
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the
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air
is really
bad
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worse
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than in rural areas.
Nonetheless
,
people
can still adapt
this
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to this
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situation without
move
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moving
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to
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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. So, the advantage of living in
cities
is bigger than the disadvantage.
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The essay addresses both sides of the argument, comparing urban and rural living effectively.
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coherence cohesion
The main points you presented are valid and appropriately explain the advantages and disadvantages of both environments.

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