The chart shows student expenditure over a three-year period in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the spending of British students from 1996 to 1999 on the 8 various categories of products and services.

Overall

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, the highest proportion of their income was used for accommodation, food/bills/household goods, and entertainment,

whereas

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the lowest percentage was allocated for course

expenditure

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, essential travel, non-essential travel, children, and

other

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others

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. Focusing first on the most significant

expenditure

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, in 1996, over 25% went on entertainment,

while

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after three years, the corresponding figure increased by roughly 5%. As for accommodation, food/bills/household goods, in 1996, between 20 and 25 per cent of students' money was used on these categories,

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by 1999, these sums dropped slightly, to approximately 20%. As for the remaining categories, in 1996, course

expenditure

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accounted for 10% of general expenses, and for the following

years

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years,

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this

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proportion decreased marginally to nearly 7%. Regarding essential and non-essential

travels

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travel

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, less than 5% of

money

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the money

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young people spent on them throughout the period. With respect to other

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expenditure

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expenditures

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, roughly 10 and 15 per cent of their revenue students allocate for

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this

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these

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needs. Notably, almost none of

youth

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the youth

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had children during their

studentshood

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studenthood

over the 3-year period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

187 words

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The chart shows student expenditure over a three-year period in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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